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作者: 普敬 时间: 2013-12-7 07:49
标题: 【英译汉】不可征服
本帖最后由普敬于 2013-12-7 18:11 编辑

Invictus  不可征服
By William Henley  威廉•亨利

夜幕覆盖身体，黑暗无边无际。
不可征服魂灵，感谢上苍恩赐。
任凭命运重击，不退却不哭泣。
困境牢牢抓住，纵血流头不低。

恐怖阴影近逼，愤怒泪流土地。
岁月无边恐吓，依旧毫不心悸。
大门何等拥挤，承受何等责詈。
我是命运主宰，我是灵魂双翼。

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夜幕盖身体，黑暗无边际。
不可征魂灵，感谢上苍赐。
任凭命运击，不退却哭泣。
困境牢牢抓，血流头不低。

恐怖影近逼，愤怒流土地。
岁月无边吓，依旧不心悸。
大门何拥挤，承受何责詈。
命运我主宰，灵魂我双翼

Out of the night that covers me,
Black as the Pit from pole to pole,
I thank whatever gods may be,
For my unconquerable soul,

In the fell clutch of circumstance
I have not winced or cried aloud.
Under the bludgeonings of chance
My head is bloody, but unbowed

Beyond this place of wrath and tears
Looms but the Horror of the shade,
And yet the menace of the years
Finds, and shall find, me unafraid

It matters not how strait the gate,
How charged with punishments is the scroll,
I am the master of my fate,
I am the captain of my soul.

作者: 郁序新 时间: 2013-12-7 15:18
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无可征服
作者：威廉•亨利
翻译：Tulip

夜色掩埋我，漆黑漫无边。
感恩天意我，灵魂磐石坚。
纵然处穷境，含泪藏深仇。
坦然对恶命，流血不低头。

恐怖似阴霾，激怒疆土泪。
岁月似惊骇，依然大无畏。
无论门多窄，受辱度沧桑，
命运我主宰，灵魂由我掌。

Invictus
By William Henley

Out of the night that covers me,
Black as the Pit from pole to pole,
I thank whatever gods may be,
For my unconquerable soul,

In the fell clutch of circumstance
I have not winced or cried aloud.
Under the bludgeonings of chance
My head is bloody, but unbowed

Beyond this place of wrath and tears
Looms but the Horror of the shade,
And yet the menace of the years
Finds, and shall find, me unafraid

It matters not how strait the gate,
How charged with punishments is the scroll,
I am the master of my fate,
I am the captain of my soul.

作者: 普敬 时间: 2013-12-7 17:56

郁序新发表于 2013-12-7 15:18
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