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作者: 右边的人 时间: 2017-3-11 00:57
标题: Breathing Mind
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Armed with moonlight shadows, leaf-carved angles occpuied
sapphire sky, beloved and well-preserved nightingle's sing
penetrated the tranquil mind. Crossfires, frustration——
Seduced me, Lord's eyes, away from the over-farmed blind soil,
absent-spirited but far-reaching territory of endless fights!

Dripped into the sore-footed and sombre-feathered ripple
of dancing ring; cynical swamps, rose-alike tenderness
touched me when dusts of memories lost in a rolling wheel.
Brittle garments, half-shaped thoughts, inseparable bouquets of
glowing solace were growing, fascinating, still unseen.

What if laid yourself down, my ever-altering iron-hearted
sublime of white percussion? Summoned it, unresistently;
unfolded it, devoured the darkness of the sufferable night.
Beyond this unflowering gloomy sky searched for the features
among the flicker stars, from the frosty heart-shaped eyes.

2017.3.7 night

作者: 张锐 时间: 2017-3-11 14:29
非常流动的诗意，欣赏了。在这里贴英文诗不太容易引起共鸣。不过真正的诗人写诗都是写给自己的。像写日记。祝周末愉快！

作者: 梁树春 时间: 2017-3-11 17:00
还是移到翻译版吧。

作者: 右边的人 时间: 2017-3-12 00:21

张锐发表于 2017-3-11 14:29
非常流动的诗意，欣赏了。在这里贴英文诗不太容易引起共鸣。不过真正的诗人写诗都是写给自己的。像写日记。 ...

谢谢理解！用英文写作是一种尝试，就像用英文交流一样，不同的语言有不同的奇妙之处。

作者: 叶如钢 时间: 2017-3-12 06:49
本帖最后由叶如钢于 2017-3-12 06:53 编辑

very nice

I would like to suggest to pay a bit more attention to grammar.

作者: 张锐 时间: 2017-3-12 23:55

右边的人发表于 2017-3-12 00:21
谢谢理解！用英文写作是一种尝试，就像用英文交流一样，不同的语言有不同的奇妙之处。

是的。不断尝试，不断探索。坚持自己，超越自己。

作者: 右边的人 时间: 2017-3-13 09:00

叶如钢发表于 2017-3-12 06:49
very nice

I would like to suggest to pay a bit more attention to grammar.

Thank you! Grammar is a big problem I have to resolve.

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