请懂英文的朋友帮忙检查 网友为我翻译的诗歌 我学习不用功,书到用时方狠少啊,为了中国云诗歌走向世界,特意请网友“天上的云”帮忙翻译了一首诗歌,请懂英文的朋友批评指点,不胜感谢。 翻译作者:天上的云 母亲啊 请闭上您的眼睛 . W2 t' o( r; d3 B+ A7 W
(Mom, please close your eyes)" l' w) e/ J" v6 s
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我在白云村日夜忙碌母亲瘫痪后的事
- U% i# [5 _/ \9 v& o' t9 kI am busying in looking after my paralyzed mother day and night in BaiYun Village
/ e& ^# u" A; o* k看每日农经 种植尽可能致富的植物4 [" Q4 O- t# _ q! b1 J
Study agronomy daily and planting economic plants as much as possible to get -rich-quick; v3 h! z1 v0 @6 Y+ I
村庄容得下我奔小康的梦想吗+ q: E2 C. J3 k* X w' B8 P4 l
Would the village accommodate my fairly well-off dream?' X- R% d8 h: c" a+ d! M
我跟石头一样咬紧贫穷的牙关) ?+ `: Q$ r* Q6 N8 l/ T z
I set my impoverished teeth as stone
, w( J6 k' [ }4 Y7 U Y( Y) s, {: R1 o和妻子在石头间挖掘美好幸福的阳光
4 c# t2 c B' a, fMining the beautiful sunshine with my wife amongst the stones# o) O: W0 u8 q [% ~' w& ^
我们把未来的小楼房都设计好了 V9 B* l& |0 A
Our small building for the future is well designed3 r* x5 x8 b7 K! q- k Q$ F
需要有明亮的窗户来盛装东方斜射的光明' U2 e: A1 z z
Having bright windows to contain eastern oblique light
2 C+ R. g0 A- p s/ T这样母亲就能感受到春天的温暖: n! O9 N3 J Q* ~3 W+ K$ _
So that my mom can feel the warmth of spring 僵硬的母亲像一只蜷缩的茧; ?( C) w( X; _# K$ b# E8 a2 `
Mom lying like a curled up cocoon
3 ^+ V( ~! Y. h: z. D她病床对面空着父亲躺过的床2 e! J4 B5 I! V$ n( }* S- [
Opposite to an empty bed of my father ever( \$ o: C& c& `6 i4 e) T* C! H9 B
母亲像被烧过的锡纸眼角挂着凝重的眼霜
u7 I/ o) D/ J$ V ]+ W! _9 F; yLike a burnt tinfoil hung with solemn eye-cream in her canthus
3 ]: k5 y7 ^( y4 Z; B我知道您病得不轻啊谁又能拯救呢 g* ?0 b7 \1 k2 q
I know you are very ill, while who can save you?: `! h: [$ t* m) a
呵我亲爱的母亲您迷离的目光有如刀枪
8 y5 s4 m- k! f' c, K+ AOh, my dear Mom, your blurred eyes like a sword2 }! n) f$ k( }$ ?
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几年过去了 我一直没有修好我们的房子
* y* N7 ?& t) i2 w- kOver the years I cannot build up our house3 x0 u: G' e; d. {" u4 l3 x
我们夫妻俩多少回蒙头流泪9 \8 H7 `5 ?4 U) z, O4 X
How many tears we wept hooded in bed ! O0 A) L8 }, g) G2 i; ]1 h1 S% O q
在您隔壁的子夜里我们听到了您的哭泣+ }, ?7 h) u9 u
We heard you cry in the midnight on your next door [% ~+ [& ] j/ O
我们不敢注视您的眼睛啊7 F( P5 |8 [2 X" H0 ?, A0 w
We dare not look into your eyes, _ G3 j0 k# X. a$ N3 v
因您的病不可救药 神明也束手无策
e3 B. M/ q& Y, O/ j$ L2 G) NBecause of your illness is far beyond remedy, , Z6 J' `& k d, ~8 z
even god can do nothing 来看望您的人都用善意的谎言祝福您早日康复4 I$ a- I# _) R6 v7 d
People come to see you with well-meaning crammer wishing you a speedy recovery2 j& ~6 v4 e( o q
我却希望您早一天把眼睛闭上
9 f3 ~( k: J6 {; lI hope you close your eyes even one day earlier
, c9 @$ \+ E, T q闭上您的眼睛就等于打开了无垠的蓝天
" R3 d! k: R @3 p6 f+ AClose your eyes is equal to open the boundless blue sky
/ E I: r" ~% H9 Z4 a: y% J闭上您的眼睛吧 母亲$ ~& L7 N$ _9 Q! j
Please close your eyes, Mom
9 j! Z- c0 \* W; Z闭上您的眼睛我和妻子就可以用奶嘴哺育您的来生
U6 S7 a& \' h/ {. {Close your eyes so my wife and I can use the nipple feeding your eternity |