当你老了（参照译文改编）

叶如钢

潘学峰 发表于 2018-1-19 01:27
你这样说武断

你查查网上。

潘学峰

叶如钢 发表于 2018-1-19 03:28
你查查网上。

不用查了，我已经说得很清楚了。晚安吧！

叶如钢

潘学峰 发表于 2018-1-19 01:26
我和我的英美朋友讨论过

CRITICAL ANALYSIS

In the first two lines, the speaker pictures his beloved as “old, and gray and full of sleep”, “nodding by the fire”, taking down and reading “this” book, which probably refers to the book that was to become The Countess Kathleen and Various Legends and Lyrics. The image evoked is of a sleepy old woman by the fire. The physical appearance of the woman is summarized by the word “gray” – her hair, eyes and skin have become lustreless and dull. The phrase “full of sleep” suggests weariness, peace and her proximity to death.

叶如钢

潘学峰 发表于 2018-1-19 01:26
我和我的英美朋友讨论过

CRITICAL ANALYSIS

In the first two lines, the speaker pictures his beloved as “old, and gray and full of sleep”, “nodding by the fire”, taking down and reading “this” book, which probably refers to the book that was to become The Countess Kathleen and Various Legends and Lyrics. The image evoked is of a sleepy old woman by the fire. The physical appearance of the woman is summarized by the word “gray” – her hair, eyes and skin have become lustreless and dull. The phrase “full of sleep” suggests weariness, peace and her proximity to death.

潘学峰

叶如钢 发表于 2018-1-19 03:26
诗歌不必前后注解， 重复。

逻辑性，不是前后注解和重复，是逻辑性

潘学峰

叶如钢 发表于 2018-1-19 03:26
但是， 我没有来一个: "我已经说清楚了“。 没必要吧。

我们的分析就放在这里供高人辨析好了。

叶如钢

潘学峰 发表于 2018-1-19 01:29
不用查了，我已经说得很清楚了。晚安吧！

你说得确实很清楚。 但那不等于你对。

你的英美朋友也未必正确。 你看看我转贴的分析。 都是一家之言。

叶如钢

潘学峰 发表于 2018-1-19 01:30
逻辑性，不是前后注解和重复，是逻辑性

诗歌不必前后重复。

人老了， 会 full of sleep ，  这很逻辑。

潘学峰

叶如钢 发表于 2018-1-19 03:30
CRITICAL ANALYSIS

In the first two lines, the speaker pictures his beloved as “old, and gray a ...

所以是"气色" 不是特指"头发"

叶如钢

潘学峰 发表于 2018-1-19 01:31
我们的分析就放在这里供高人辨析好了。

各抒己见。讨论有益。