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李世纯 发表于 2018-9-21 11:10
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Undressing to Boost Fame

谢谢

土登扎西

再改：
Sloughing to Boost Fame

Because of staying in the dark underground fo long, it has no record and experiences.

By no means, it sees through and perceives in advance. It has less tunes than birds.

But by sloughing in summer days,
whatevever it comes across
It acts affectedly to chirp:
Acknowledged,  acknowledged... acknowledged...

李世纯

土登扎西 发表于 2018-9-21 14:27
再改：
Sloughing to Boost Fame

再改：
Sloughing to Boost Fame

Because of staying in the dark underground fo long, it has no record and experiences.  

By no means, it sees through and perceives in advance. It has less tunes than birds.

But by sloughing in summer days,
whatevever it comes across
It acts affectedly to chirp:
Acknowledged,  acknowledged... acknowledged...



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土登扎西

李世纯 发表于 2018-9-21 15:15
再改：
Sloughing to Boost Fame

谢谢

土登扎西

再改：
Sloughing to Boost Fame

It stays in the dark underground fo long, and it has no record and experiences.

By no means, it sees through and perceives in advance. It has less tunes than birds.

But by sloughing in summer days,
whatevever it comes across
It acts affectedly to chirp:
Acknowledged,  acknowledged... acknowledged...

李世纯

土登扎西 发表于 2018-9-21 17:36
再改：
Sloughing to Boost Fame

  楼主| 发表于 2018-9-21 17:36 | 只看该作者
再改：
Sloughing to Boost Fame

It stays in the dark underground fo long, and it has no record and experiences.

By no means, it sees through and perceives in advance. It has less tunes than birds.

But by sloughing in summer days,
whatevever it comes across
It acts affectedly to chirp:
Acknowledged,  acknowledged... acknowledged...In the red, still at least three mistakes.



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that's all right，in the red, still at least three obvious mistakes there

土登扎西

李世纯 发表于 2018-9-21 20:50
楼主| 发表于 2018-9-21 17:36 | 只看该作者
再改：
Sloughing to Boost Fame

It has stayed underground in the darkness for long, and it has had no record and experiences.