【汉译英】拙译黑朗的《一滴水泅渡了两千年》

熊重阳

源头：一滴水泅渡了两千年
黑朗

一小滴雨辗转了两千年。有时睡在深海，有时跑在大江大河
一小滴泪有时躲在眼窝，有时爬上云朵
来自身体内外的流淌：有时是小情怀，有时是大天下

——哦！临近端午，有些泛滥的水
它们不懂山河的疼痛。还把一叶龙舟当令箭，吆喝着，摆弄着
让本该平静的水溅起浪花
——哦！这个端午，也有些芝麻绿豆的错觉
它们牵着一株植物的命，从黑夜走到白昼，从生走到死
那些粽米：从高空抛起，又被深水淹没

五月疼出了一些声音
不听蝉鸣脱壳，不听啼血杜鹃，不听蛙鼓噪舌……
在空荡荡的天体
我们听见：一道闪电撕裂另一道闪电，一声雷搬动另一声雷


Source of river – A drop of water swam across two thousand years
Original by Hei Lang / Translated by Yi Yuan

A small drop of rain has tossed about for two thousand years,
Sometimes sleeping in the deep ocean, and sometimes running in big rivers
A small drop of tear sometimes hid in eye-sockets, and sometimes ascended to the clouds  
Flows through inside and outside of my body, sometimes are a snug bosom of feelings
And sometimes are the expanding land under heaven.

-- Oh! With the advent of Duan Wu Festival, there were bodies of flooding water
That have no idea of the sufferings of my homeland.
They took a dragon-boat as the token of authority, making a big fuss,   
And make a splash where water should have been left still.
-- Oh! This Duan Wu Festival, there are trivial misconceptions

They lead the life of a plant, walking from morning till night, from life to death
Those leaf-wrapped rices – tossed in the upper air, and submerged then in the deep water

May has been pained to make a few sounds
Without listening to cicada’s crying for sloughing, to cuckoo’s lamenting, and to frog’s croaking
In the hollow of a heavenly body
We heard – a lightning split another lightning, and a thunder displaced another thunder

叶如钢

翻译得十分精彩！
翻译栏非常需要重阳这样的高手。 尤其是有多年的英文语境之修炼。

熊重阳

叶如钢 发表于 2016-6-22 17:23
翻译得十分精彩！
翻译栏非常需要重阳这样的高手。 尤其是有多年的英文语境之修炼。

谢谢如钢雅评。

叶如钢

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