译阿什贝利《一些树》

阿泳

译诗：一些树

约翰 阿什贝利丨原作
雪歌（阿泳）丨译

这些树令人惊异：每一棵
邻接着另一棵，就像交谈
一种无声的表演。
因为偶然地机遇，它们

心怀默契，从各自的世界
赶到这个清晨
相会。你和我
突然成为这些树

表达的物像：
他们安静地岀现在这里
露出预兆；不久以后
我们将触摸、相爱、细语呢喃。

我们欢快地，包裹
在真实秀美的世界里：
充满喧哗的一片宁静
浮现出微笑合唱的

一幅油画，一个冬日的清晨。
置于幻美的光束，移动着
我们的日子被沉默笼罩
这些口音仿佛他们自己的甲胄。

1998年初译
2013年12月19日再译
2017年5月10日修改

英文原作： Some Trees

by John Ashbery

These are amazing: each
Joining a neighbor, as though speech
Were a still performance.
Arranging by chance

To meet as far this morning
From the world as agreeing
With it, you and I
Are suddenly what the trees try

To tell us we are:
That their merely being there
Means something; that soon
We may touch, love, explain.

And glad not to have invented
Some comeliness, we are surrounded:
A silence already filled with noises,
A canvas on which emerges

A chorus of smiles, a winter morning.
Place in a puzzling light, and moving,
Our days put on such reticence
These accents seem their own defense.

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李世纯

看似这是一首外国灯谜诗

主题《一些树》属谜面一部分

主旨是要我们读者猜出

诗歌要表达的某种事物（谜底）

李世纯

李世纯 发表于 2018-11-19 15:32
看似这是一首外国灯谜诗

主题《一些树》属谜面一部分

译诗：一些树

约翰 阿什贝利丨原作
雪歌（阿泳）丨译

这些树令人惊异：每一棵
邻接着另一棵，就像交谈
一种无声的表演。
因为偶然地机遇，它们

心怀默契，从各自的世界
赶到这个清晨
相会。你和我
突然成为这些树

表达的物像：              （）
他们安静地岀现在这里
露出预兆；不久以后
我们将触摸、相爱、细语呢喃。

我们欢快地，包裹
在真实秀美的世界里：
充满喧哗的一片宁静
浮现出微笑合唱的

一幅油画，一个冬日的清晨。
置于幻美的光束，移动着
我们的日子被沉默笼罩
这些口音仿佛他们自己的甲胄。

1998年初译
2013年12月19日再译
2017年5月10日修改

英文原作： Some Trees

by John Ashbery

These are amazing: each
Joining a neighbor, as though speech
Were a still performance.
Arranging by chance

To meet as far this morning
From the world as agreeing
With it,you and I          （其中的六个代词分别指代哪些单词？错一个，想必：我们没读懂该诗）
Are suddenly what the trees try

To tell us we are:
That their merely being there
Means something; that soon
We may touch, love, explain.

And glad not to have invented
Some comeliness, we are surrounded:
A silence already filled with noises,
A canvas on which emerges

A chorus of smiles, a winter morning.
Place in a puzzling light, and moving,
Our days put on such reticence
These accents seem their own defense.

李世纯

译诗：一些树

约翰 阿什贝利丨原作
雪歌（阿泳）丨译

这些树令人惊异：每一棵
邻接着另一棵，就像交谈
一种无声的表演。
因为偶然地机遇，它们

心怀默契，从各自的世界
赶到这个清晨
相会。你和我     （你和我分别指代哪些单词？）
突然成为这些树

表达的物像：
他们安静地岀现在这里
露出预兆；不久以后
我们将触摸、相爱、细语呢喃。

我们欢快地，包裹
在真实秀美的世界里：
充满喧哗的一片宁静
浮现出微笑合唱的

一幅油画，一个冬日的清晨。
置于幻美的光束，移动着
我们的日子被沉默笼罩
这些口音仿佛他们自己的甲胄。

1998年初译
2013年12月19日再译
2017年5月10日修改

英文原作： Some Trees

by John Ashbery

These are amazing: each
Joining a neighbor, as though speech
Were a still performance.
Arranging by chance

To meet as far this morning
From the world as agreeing
With it, you and I
Are suddenly what the trees try

To tell us we are:
That their merely being there
Means something; that soon
We may touch, love, explain.

And glad not to have invented
Some comeliness, we are surrounded:
A silence already filled with noises,
A canvas on which emerges

A chorus of smiles, a winter morning.
Place in a puzzling light, and moving,
Our days put on such reticence
These accents seem their own defense.
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李世纯

李世纯 发表于 2018-11-19 15:51
译诗：一些树

约翰 阿什贝利丨原作

又是

阿什贝利

看似

其人

诗人中诗人

其作

诗作中诗作

李世纯

好一首诗中诗
值得我们有幸译一译

李世纯

李世纯 发表于 2018-12-15 21:49
好一首诗中诗
值得我们有幸译一译

译诗：一些树

约翰 阿什贝利丨原作
雪歌（阿泳）丨译

这些树令人惊异：每一棵
邻接着另一棵，就像交谈
一种无声的表演。
因为偶然地机遇，它们

心怀默契，从各自的世界
赶到这个清晨
相会。你和我     （你和我分别指代哪些单词？）
突然成为这些树

表达的物像：
他们安静地岀现在这里
露出预兆；不久以后
我们将触摸、相爱、细语呢喃。

我们欢快地，包裹
在真实秀美的世界里：
充满喧哗的一片宁静
浮现出微笑合唱的

一幅油画，一个冬日的清晨。
置于幻美的光束，移动着
我们的日子被沉默笼罩
这些口音仿佛他们自己的甲胄。

1998年初译
2013年12月19日再译
2017年5月10日修改

英文原作： Some Trees

by John Ashbery

These are amazing: each
Joining a neighbor, as though speech
Were a still performance.
Arranging by chance
彼此彼此，我们跻身彼此
神奇神奇，我们灵异神奇
仿佛，我们仿佛在静静描述
啊，机缘，描述那机缘一幕
To meet as far this morning
From the world as agreeing
With it, you and I
Are suddenly what the trees try

To tell us we are:
That their merely being there
Means something; that soon
We may touch, love, explain.

And glad not to have invented
Some comeliness, we are surrounded:
A silence already filled with noises,
A canvas on which emerges

A chorus of smiles, a winter morning.
Place in a puzzling light, and moving,
Our days put on such reticence
These accents seem their own defense.
收藏收藏 彼此彼此，我们跻身彼此
神奇神奇，我们灵异神奇
仿佛，我们仿佛在静静描述
啊，机缘，描述那机缘一幕

李世纯

李世纯 发表于 2018-12-16 11:39
译诗：一些树

约翰 阿什贝利丨原作

哦——跻身彼此
啊——灵异神奇
这是——是在静静描述？
嗯——描述那机缘一幕：

李世纯

Some Trees                          树   之   说

by John Ashbery

These are amazing: each
Joining a neighbor, as though speech
Were a still performance.
Arranging by chance

彼此，彼此，我们跻身彼此
神奇，神奇，我们灵异神奇
看哪，我们仿佛在静静描述
描述啊——那机缘巧合一幕


To meet as far this morning
From the world as agreeing
With it, you and I
Are suddenly what the trees try

我们离群越界
我们相会缔约
我们即日上午
拟告速战速捷——


To tell us we are:
That their merely being there
Means something; that soon
We may touch, love, explain.

彼此要一致，两厢要化一
一切履行树的指意：



And glad not to have invented
Some comeliness, we are surrounded:
A silence already filled with noises,
A canvas on which emerges

A chorus of smiles, a winter morning.
Place in a puzzling light, and moving,
Our days put on such reticence
These accents seem their own defense.