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李世纯

李世纯 发表于 2018-10-4 22:08
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just moment

李世纯

李世纯 发表于 2018-10-4 22:09
just moment

sorry, just a moment,a lang moment, a  lang lang  moment, please
and I'm sure of my comprehension

李世纯

李世纯 发表于 2018-10-4 22:16
sorry, just a moment,a lang moment, a  lang lang  moment, please
and I'm sure of my comprehensio ...

李世纯 发表于 2018-10-4 22:09
just moment

sorry, just a moment,a lang moment, a  lang lang  moment, please
and I'm sure of your comprehension

李世纯

潘学峰 发表于 2018-10-4 21:55
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By Xuefeng Pan

Many times have passed until I begin to appreciate your heart
Farewell, wordlessly between you and I, wouldn't go too far,
In a hidden place, I am sure, you will wait to see hopes start,
And longing for a fresh new world in the coming next year




Copyrights Reserved, posted in 2018
对一个人的不公就是对所有人的威胁


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but sure of mine below,  i'm afraid:



1. until Many times've passed by I failed to appreciate your heart


2. Many times have passed by till I begin to appreciate your heart

李世纯

李世纯 发表于 2018-10-5 10:43
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1'. until Many times've passed by I fail (ed) to appreciate your heart

潘学峰

李世纯 发表于 2018-10-5 12:46
1'. until Many times've passed by I fail (ed) to appreciate your heart

改的很棒，确实不应该用until在原诗歌